[Cosmo-dev] Cosmo landing page typos

[Matthew Eernisse]

Just to nit-pick -- "Web" is a proper noun, short for "World Wide Web" 
(the same way "Ford" is short for "Ford Motor Company") -- so it should 
be "Web application," "Web calendar," etc.


Pieter Hartsook wrote:
> I can change the copy after we see responses to Ted's suggestions. See
> my in-line comments:
>>
>> From: Ted Leung <twl at osafoundation.org>
>> Date: February 28, 2007 4:56:20 PM PST
>> To: Cosmo Mailing List <cosmo-dev at osafoundation.org>
>> Subject: [Cosmo-dev] Cosmo landing page typos
>>
>>
>> Hi folks,
>>
>> I'd like to start a precedent for doing as much work on Cosmo landing 
>> pages,
>> etc on the cosmo-dev list.   To that end, I want to report a few typos on
>> the main page:
>>
>> * The 0.6 release is Cosmo project's first experimentally usable web
>> calendar application. => Cosmo 0.6 is the first release to include an
>> experimentally useable web calendar application.
>>
> 
> "usable" seems to be the preferred spelling rather than "useable",
> other than that Ted's suggestion is better because it positions the
> web app as a part of Cosmo rather than equivalent to Cosmo.
> 
>> * The Cosmo project encompasses both a sharing server as well as web
>> application pieces of the Chandler small workgroup collaboration 
>> suite. =>
>> Cosmo includes both a sharing server and web application pieces of the
>> Chandler small workgroup collaboration suite.
> 
> encompass is a synonym of include, but I  support using 25-cent words
> instead of dollar-words if possible in descriptive copy.
> 
> replacing "as well as" with "and" is simpler/better
> 
>>
>> * Cosmo supports both one-way sharing and multi-way sharing with many 
>> people
>> editing the same shared calendar collection. => Cosmo supports both 
>> one-way
>> sharing and multi-way sharing of calendar collections.
> 
> I think what could be lost with Ted's suggestion here is the idea that
> a single calendar can be edited by many people. The one-way/multi-way
> terms are unusual in this context. How about:
> 
> Cosmo supports both read-only and read-write sharing of calendar
> collections with others.
> 
>>
>> Ted
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